Welcome to the sixth part of my series on storytelling, TV & Film, part of the Author Toolbox Blog Hop hosted by Raimey Gallant. The hop is a monthly event where authors share resources and lessons they’ve learned about writing. To browse other hop posts click here:
Last time I wrote about supporting characters, and before that setting, plot, characters, and what first episodes of TV shows can teach us about writing first chapters. These are fun posts to write, and not just because I get to binge watch shows on Netflix!
In this post I’ll discuss common issues in TV shows, including those with magic and superpowers, and how they relate to our writing.
My victims (shows & films):
Yu-Gi-Oh, Psych, Fullmetal Alchemist, The Flash, Harry Potter, and Once Upon a Time.
Warning: Spoiler Alert for the above shows!
What common pitfalls should we be aware of whilst writing?
Yu-Gi-Oh: Show, Don’t Tell.
I’ve been watching old episodes of Yu-Gi-Oh recently, a series I loved growing up, and there are often scenes where villains tell us exactly how evil they are or what their plans are, to the point of repetition. This drags out episodes and makes the show take forever to get to the point.
If a character is evil, show it through their actions to bring them to life. Have them kick a puppy or throw their coffee over someone. They don’t need to describe their evil plans for us to know how bad they are. Beware, you don’t always need to show. If a journey has no relevance to the plot, for example, it’s okay just to say ‘Three days later, bags under their eyes, they arrived…’
Psych: Be Consistent.
In ‘Ghosts,’ an episode from Psych Season 3, Shawn says he broke his phone and hasn’t gotten a new one yet. A couple of scenes later he says Gus told him he’s quitting Psych via text message. I love this show, especially the hilarious interactions between the characters, but these kind of inconsistencies are distracting.

Make sure facts in your story are consistent. If someone broke their phone they can’t receive calls or texts until it’s been replaced. Beware inconsistencies about when key plot events took place too, and if a character breaks their arm make sure it doesn’t heal faster than it really could. (Unless your characters have magic, but we’ll get to that later.)
Fullmetal Alchemist: Don’t kill characters just for the shock factor.
A good character death makes you tear up. I’m still broken up over the death of Maes Hughes in Fullmetal Alchemist. His death was so shocking, and his daughter crying when he was being buried was heart wrenching. His death had a purpose though: To drive other characters, particularly his best friend, to solve the mystery of his murder and confront a larger conspiracy.
I’m sure we can all think of characters who died for no reason except to shock or upset us. Characters should never be killed off for this reason. If a character dies their death must have purpose, whether it’s to up the stakes for our characters or motivate them into action.
The Flash: Beware Superpowers.
Characters with superpowers are tricky to write, and one of the main issues I have with the Flash is his super speed. His power alternates between overpowered and dumbed down for the sake of the plot. One second he’s so fast he can dash to the coffee shop and back in between tossing a pancake, and the next he’s too slow to save a hostage and stop a criminal at the same time, just so the writers can showcase a new team members abilities.
These kind of inconsistencies can be jarring and drag your reader from the world of your story. If a character is fast there needs to be a concrete reason why their powers are suddenly far less powerful. Make superpowers consistent, in both strengths and flaws.
Harry Potter: Don’t let romantic subplots distract from the story.
Harry Potter did this well. The romantic subplot didn’t take over the story, but it felt organic and natural when it did happen. Harry’s crush and awkwardness around Cho was endearing. Hermoine’s relationship with Krum added a new dynamic between her and Ron. Of course I didn’t ship any of the couples that ended up together, but when do I ever?
Don’t introduce romance to check boxes. Some relationships in TV feel forced, the couples bland, and they don’t add anything to the story. Some feel like they’ve been added because romantic subplots are expected. My opinion? Write meaningful relationships. If it doesn’t feel real, scrap it. Don’t break up a good couple just to create drama either, or tease a relationship for ages only to break them up as soon as they get together.
Once Upon a Time: Be careful with magic.
Once Upon a Time’s Evil Queen can teleport using magic, yet she often uses carriages to travel across the country. As a viewer this doesn’t make sense, especially when you consider that it’d be more intimidating to suddenly appear in front of people, and it’s never explained either.
If you have magic in your story make clear rules about how it works and follow them. If a character chooses not to use magic when it would be easier, explain why, or you’ll leave your audience wondering. It could be they can only teleport on Wednesdays, or it takes a lot of energy so they don’t do it often. Just don’t overlook how powerful it is, or use it inconsistently.
Other things to be aware of:
Filler episodes: Avoid structuring your novel like a TV show. TV shows often have ‘filler’ episodes, which don’t add anything to the main plot of the series, whereas each chapter of your novel should move the plot forward in some way. Try to tie up all loose ends.
Dragging the story on too long: Prison Break was frustrating because the inmates escape attempts were thwarted too many times. Have your heroes fail, but don’t overdo it.
Conflict based on miscommunication: Sometimes it’s unbelievable or can seem like the conflict is just there for the sake of it, rather than characters having a genuine reason to avoid taking to their friends or partners.
Taking the story in sudden, unexpected directions: No one expects a light-hearted comedy to suddenly develop horror elements.
Fight scenes: Watching TV can help you write fight scenes. Pay attention to the position of character’s limbs during a fight and don’t have arms or legs bend in ways they can’t!
Modern convenience: In the age of mobile phones, characters don’t need to show up at their friends houses at inconvenient times when they can just call or text…
So what have we learned?
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Show, don’t tell, except when something isn’t relevant to the plot.
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Be consistent with plot points.
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Try to tie up all loose ends.
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If you kill a character, make sure it affects the plot or characters.
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Be careful when writing about superpowers.
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Make romantic subplots meaningful and natural.
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If you have magic in your story make rules about how it works and stick to them.
Thanks for reading!
That’s probably all on TV, for now. I start a Master’s degree in Creative Writing next week, and I hope to have something cool to share from my experience 🙂
What’s your biggest pet peeve with TV shows or books? Do some plot devices drive you crazy? Let me know in the comments!
Oh god, Maes, NOT MAES! That show had two of the most painful character deaths I can think of. Sitting here, right now, the only other to match EITHER of those deaths would be Fred in HP. Talk about a punch to the gut.
It’s a great point, too, about shock value. I tell my clients about this often, and in fact it was the ONLY thing I learned in the college writing classes I took (okay, maybe not the ONLY thing, but the teacher was a narcissist butthead so)–and it is so valuable. Don’t kill someone, or write something gruesome, or put in rape or cannibalism or incest or whatever, solely to try to “get to” your reader. It won’t work. Those things have to MEAN something. The characters must drive that meaning, not the death/gore/event itself.
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Fullmetal really knew how to pull on the emotional heartstrings!
I still can’t believe Fred died in HP 😦 I hope his ghost haunts the school playing practical jokes at least!
It is indeed a valuable lesson, and a good point about writing something gruesome too. Every event in our writing should have meaning to our characters.
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Excellent point on killing off characters. Death is huge for readers as they do get attached to characters. I like how you want a clear purpose for such a drastic action. 🙂
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Thanks 🙂 I get really attached to characters myself, so when they die without a reason it’s heartbreaking!
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These are all great points.(I’ve written articles on a few of them,so you know I’m on board) The thing about the Queen always annoyed me too! lol
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Thanks! I’ll have to check them out 🙂 I confess I never noticed the Queen teleporting sometimes and using a carriage the other until my fiancee pointed it out. Now I can’t unsee it!
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Maybe she’s used the carriage when she wants to be seen around the kingdom and that lets her keep the people under her thumb
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Could be! I didn’t think of that 🙂
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It’s amazing how much we can learn if we pay attention. Excellent points. 🙂
Anna from elements of emaginette
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Thanks 🙂 It is! I can’t stop noticing things since I started this series!
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I think most of TV fails to create good shows. They should all read this post.
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That seems like the case! It’s pretty rare I find something truly outstanding to watch.
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It’s turned me into a Netflix fan!
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My biggest pet peeve, especially with police, lawyer, and medical programs is all the illegal, unethical actions taken portrayed as noble for some perceived ‘better good.’ My husband hates watching these shows with me because I’m always saying things like ‘well all this evidence will be excluded and that murderer walks’ and ‘the hospital better contact its malpractice carrier because that doctor just blatently disregarded the patient’s express written wishes.’
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There are so many issues with medical and police shows!
My partner is just as bad as me in pointing out inconsistencies, perhaps worse 🙂
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I’m getting a little tired of TV shows that keep renewing when it’s time for a logical end. I know it costs more money to keep producing new shows rather than to just keep going with the existing ones, but case in point, The Handmaid’s Tale, hello!
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Me too! We have a very poor variety of shows in the UK, but quite a few (terrible IMO) long running soap operas. I wish there was more investment in new content!
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All good things to keep in mind! And wow do I wish some of the screenwriters would read your blog, LOL. Thanks for this fun series, I’ve been loving it 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
I wonder if there are beta’s for TV shows? I’d love to get involved in the process xD
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Consistency is something I always have to point out when I’m editing. It’s always a good idea to keep a list of important names, facts, and plot lines.
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If I didn’t keep a list of important facts for my stories I’d go crazy trying to remember them all. It really is a useful tool 🙂
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Great points, Louise!
i hate when character die for no other reason than that the author needed to kill a darling or two. I never read Harry Potter, but i’ve read some people wish for more romance in there.
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Thanks Jina. I wish more authors would consider reasons to kill characters. I don’t mind if a favourite character dies, even if it does hurt, so long as it’s done well!
I think there was enough romance in Harry Potter but I would have liked to see more diversity.
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for some reason, i can’t seem to enjoy the first scenes enough to get engaged.
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I think I skim read most of the first chapter because it was a lot like a prologue. I wanted to get to the story!
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This was really well done, I enjoyed it a lot! I’ll have to remember these, especially the point about miscommunications just to drive conflict. That’s a good point. The Once Upon a Time example was so accurate! I felt that way constantly watching it, thinking “why on earth wouldn’t she just use her magic??” Haha
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Thanks 🙂 Miscommunications are one of my pet peeves in stories!
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Good writing always makes us remember the characters. All the points you made should be organic to a good writer.
Good luck on your upcoming classes. I’m looking forward to reading what you’re learning.
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Exactly 🙂 I find if I don’t connect with the characters I struggle to enjoy a story.
Thanks, I’m really looking forward to it!
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I really enjoyed this post Louise! Great point about not killing characters just for shock value, I’m sure I’ve done that in the past *face palm*. I thought the romances in Harry Potter were done really well for MG, I would have loved more focus but that wouldn’t have been right for the series, and I think Rowling did such a good job of showing how the characters were maturing over the seven books/years. Good points about magic and superpowers too, it always annoys me when the rules aren’t clear or aren’t followed, I definitely notice that being a huge fantasy fan. The best magic systems have rules and restrictions, unlimited power is too easy! 🙂
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Thanks 🙂
I don’t think I’ve ever killed characters for the shock factor, but I have been guilty of torturing them far too much ^^”
Making rules for magic is tricky, but I’m hoping to get a handle on it in both my stories because it features pretty heavily, especially in my Merlin work in progress!
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I like to write fairy stories personally, so there’s so much already in folklore to borrow from, such as iron sapping their powers, or only being able to do things on the solstice etc. I think it taking a lot of energy is a great, simple one to use and remember tho. I think half the difficulty is remembering your own rules! 😂
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It’s great to have a template, and folklore is so interesting 🙂 I’ve gone with magic taking a lot of energy in my stories too, but I’ve had to write down the other rules so I don’t forget them!
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I suspect some of the older TV shows had to repeat material for the benefit of those who had missed the previous episode (especially in the days before video recorders, DVR, and Netflix). Think of the 1980s episodes of Dr Who …
But we don’t need that in a book. If the reader misses something or forgets something, they can flick back and read it again – all the more reason to avoid repetition.
Hope your creative writing course goes well! I’ll look forward to hearing about it.
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Repeating material for those who missed the previous episode does make sense. Nowadays I’m so used to watching multiple episodes in one sitting on Netflix! You’re right we don’t need that in a book though. I often flick back, even if it’s just to re-read a really nice piece of description or dialogue 🙂
Thanks 🙂 The course is going well so far, really enjoying the first week!
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Oh this is such a wonderful feature! I’m so happy I ran into your blog. I’ll try to participate! 🙂 Yup beware of superpowers! tricky! 🙂
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Thanks so much 🙂 If you want to join the hop, head over to Raimey’s website, which has details of how to join: https://raimeygallant.com/2017/03/22/authortoolboxbloghop/
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Ty!!!
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Consistency with details can be tough. I always dread that i will write a character one way in one scene, then another way later, so a I keep copious notes. Of course, even our most meticulous efforts can sometimes go awry. That said, these are all great points to be reminded of. Thank you, and I hope your degree program is a lot of fun.
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Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts, and great examples to illustrate your points! I definitely need to add a few more shows to my queue… 🙂
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